Talk:It's a Hard Life

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This seems to be a good start to a story, but it badly needs the punctuation, spelling, and layout edited. Should I do that?

I think that's the idea. If your willing go ahead and improve the narrative.

Goals for 'It's a Hard Life'

This story was started as a slow progressing story. Where the son takes over his dad's support duty to support his family, and eventually gets the privileges of the man of the house. Let's try to make this story somewhat realistically progressing. No kid and no mom would suddenly jump into each other's arms out of the blue, unless of course they're mentally deranged.

So, slow and drawn out.

If somebody would like to provide an outline that would be good.

Outline for the story

• She starts his back massage and he asks her about the front side.

• Progression of the massages
  • A session where he massages his mom, while she instructs him in the art of massage; of course, she's properly covered and prudish
  • Another session where she massages him and this time she does his chest and thighs while looking at his covered erection
  • a small section where she hesitates about giving him further massages because he's always erect when she does it, could be a small fight where he reminds her of her duty to him since he's the sole supporter of the household
  • Another session where he starts by being naked instead of wearing boxers, so when she's doing his front, she sees him fully erected and throbbing.
  • Another session where he massages her, and takes a few liberties and gets few glimpses of her hidden charms
  • Another session where she massages him and for the first time touches his erection 'accidentally'; does not jack him off

• Mother feels appropriately guilty, stops things and tries to find a man to take care of her.
• the son gets angry and turns his attention to his sisters
• Mother realizes the issue developing in her family and needs to do something. She doesn't feel right about where her relation with her son was heading. Can't let the life of her daughters screwed up. Can't lose the support of her son, so she can't try to push him into a healthy relationship, what to do? (this point is kind of hard to handle because we're in first person POV)