Talk:Jack's story

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Change point of view (Kay): Clay yells at Kay for bringing dinner: What are people gonna think about my food, you work here but you won't eat it? Clarice, the black girl who is the other waitress, sasses him about it. He orders Clarice to go in the back and clean. He goes back, to cook. Kay works the front alone. She puts in orders. Some come up, but erraticly, and some incorrectly. She goes to look. Clay is screwing Clarice. Kay later asks Clarice: Yeah, she says, that's what he wants, that's what I give him. I need the money.

Change point of view (Helen): Jack's behaved, but he wants money. Won't tell Mom why: I shouldn't have to, it's my money. It's our'n, she says, and don't you get too big for your britches. Big argument. She relents, gives him some cash.

Kay wants to quit First National Burger. Mom says no -- you can't be a quitter. You've got to do it. Kay refuses to say why, makes up a reason. Ends with her giving in and working.

Change point of view (Clay): Clay uses the money to pay for a hooker, an Asian woman who's his first. She blows him, but then he's ripped off of all his money and thrown half-naked and beaten-up into the street. A co-worker finds him, brings him home. He tries to avoid Mom, but she finds him. Comforts him. One things leads to another.

Change point of view (Kay): Kay goes to work. Clay tries to force her. Jack shows up, fights him off. At home, he insists that Mom allow her to quit. Mom does. Kay's so impressed that she sneaks into his room and screws him.

Mom gets a job of her own ... her first (so she'll be on more equal terms with Jack). Kay's proud of her Mom. Finds a second job herself. Money's rolling in. Kay's job lets her off early one day. She comes home, finds Mom and Jack screwing. Joins in.